cWo All-Purpose FeedBack Thread-a-palooza '14

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First off...





...hi. I'm Shane. :3


I will treat this thread as the all-in-one when it comes to my feedback here, regardless of the character. First off --

pwxonline.proboards.com/thread/1558/beginning-ruready


Bada-boom. The 'intro' for The Crue... I posted Axl's app, about to finish the others, then FINALLY, finally, finally work on the segment I've been pushed to do but neglected cuz I have been FAR off course for far too long >.<

...sooo. ANY feedback concerning that short piece will be GREATLY appreciated. It isn't much, it's basically a 'hype vid', ala a debuting/returning character on a televised wrestling show. Doesn't go too far into any of the character's true story, BUT... it does give a tiny taste of what's to come.

Accepting all CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, positive, negative, but bear in mind... my 'real roleplays' are far removed from this. Lengthy, detailed, and perhaps too long, if I'm to be honest... but I'm definitely interested in how you guys and gals feel about this. Thank you, and have a STELLAR-IFIC day!! ^__^


~ $hane-o

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pwxonline.proboards.com/thread/1566/dear-darin-scared


My first 'real' RP here, as Tifa. She's kinda my fave character of the bunch, and I've been told she's the fave of others as well. She resonates the most with my RL self... so when I write as her, it flows much more freely. I've always felt like characters that are the most closely connected to us are the ones that make for the best story-telling. Which is why, for the most part since 2001, I've always ran w/my character 'raYne'...who's basically me, cranked to 12. Cuz I'm ALWAYS at 11.

Again, any and ALL constructive criticism greatly appreciated. Thank you, and now I'm off to work on my segments and match... TLC is gonna be JAWESOME!! ^__^


~ $hane-o-mac 3ry